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Beginning with a discussion of Galileo's key experiment, describe the emergence of (strict) causality. You will need to develop the idea of predicting the motion of an object by considering the forces acting upon it.
Briefly indicate how this (strictly) causal picture differs from both Greek ideas about motion, and modern knowledge of the movement of elementary particles, such as electrons. |
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Planning and organisation of material:
Well planned, following more-or-less the direction indicated by the question. Interesting to read and easy to follow.
Use of sources:
A substantial range of appropriate sources, properly referenced.
Analysis:
On the whole a very good and thoughtful essay. I think it wold have been strengthened by discussing a simpler example - suc as throwing an object vertically upwards - and discussing the forces and how they cause the motion to change (change in velocity is an acceleration; F = ma).
Presentation:
Clearly written with sound sentences and robust paragraphs.
Overall comments:
Thoughtful and well-constructed. See script for detailed points [not provided on-line].
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'Utopias are more concerned with escapism than effecting social change.' Discuss. |
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Planning and organisation of material:
This was alway[s] relevant and mode a good case for escapism. The way in which you organised it was pleasing because it traced ideas instead of merely listing one text after another in a list.
Use of sources:
The impressive aspect of the essay is that you have used a substantial range of appropriate sources and moved beyond the set texts to incorporate interesting a varied ideas.
Analysis:
This essay shower thought and your marshalled your facts very effectively to support your ideas. Your analyss was wide and comprehensive covering many aspects of the subject in careful detail.
Presentation:
A well expressed and correct piece of work.
Overall comments:
I was delighted to see how your made use of your professional experience in IT to cover a wider field than the course itself. The real pleasure of this work is that it shows 'the quality of mind' which is the most important aspect of humanities essays.
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Summary of contributions to online discussion relating to America's new Utopias. |
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Very interesting contribution to the debate. You're right to raise the issue of the relationship between Utopias as a state of personal desire, and Utopias as a [...] of social organisation. Good point of who establishes the rules for these communities.
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The ideas of nineteenth century anthropology had an impact in many fields of thought. Discuss |
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Planning and organisation of material:
Wanders a bit and loses some focus. 19 Century thought and its influences is a broad subject. You needed to stick more closely with anthropology.
Use of sources:
A respectable range of relevant sources cited.
Analysis:
A bit general but apart from the gap of 'social Darwinism' and 'race theory' a fair summary.
Presentation:
Clear and well written.
Overall comments:
Concentrating on the question would have improved this work. Anthropology had its failures as well as its successes and its influence was negative as well as positive.
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